BYU main page article

by **onpoint** on Wed Mar 09, 2005 12:01 pm

No offense to the girl, but my head hurts after reading that article on the front page. :shock:

She must be young. Lots of unnecessary superlatives, over-the-top adjectives etc. Good to see BYU getting press with the school though. It's a good way for writers to get into the sports groove by covering the club sports teams. Hopefully she will learn that she doesn't have to dress the game up SO much to impress the campus . . . .

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by **Walter** on Wed Mar 09, 2005 12:04 pm

Davis slapped the winning shot into the Wolverines goal with only two minutes left in the game.

Maybe she is the writer for hockey as well?

by **TrainerDan** on Wed Mar 09, 2005 12:33 pm

I agree that the writing of the article needs help. The press is nice but if the article is written poorly (ie: choppy, trying to use too many big words, etc...) then it's not so great. I read that in the school papaer yesterday and was wondering why they don't have someone better reporting the games.

by **byualum** on Wed Mar 09, 2005 1:32 pm

TrainerDan wrote: wondering why they don't have someone better reporting the games.

It's not football...

by **JHBYU33** on Wed Mar 09, 2005 3:18 pm

THis line cracks me up

"Austin then proceeded to rifle the ball behind his back, stinging the bottom corner of the net for the tenth point of the game. The BYU sidelines erupted with shouts of amazement at Austin’s fancy goal."

by **onpoint** on Wed Mar 09, 2005 3:33 pm

It was, after all, a pretty fancy goal!

by **byualum** on Wed Mar 09, 2005 3:45 pm

"Jordan Harris kept the Wolverines on their toes with some big hits, but he also received a penalty for his aggressive chatter with the other team."

What!?!?